September 22nd, 2010
First Drafts Are So Embarrassing (post 1)
I think this is good cathartic feature for me to start, although I’m not sure if I’ll be able to keep going or get engulfed in a wave of shame. Anyway, first and possibly only FDASE post:
Was–
Mark suddenly sat up and looked deeply Sanjeet in the eyes. “I’m a good person.”
Sanjeet rubbed the fronts of his thighs uneasily. “Sure.”
Adverb mania!!!
Better:
Mark sat up and looked Sanjeet in the eyes. “I’m a good person.”
Sanjeet rubbed the fronts of his thighs. “Sure.”
Buy the book:
laughing. you are awesome.
if i posted some before and afters, you would read and think ‘oh, look… the second sentence has a different set of random technical terms i wish i hadn’t been made to read’.
September 23rd, 2010 at 1:49 amOh, this could get very, very fun!
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